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小鳥の歌 21

A storm-fallen tree
Leaves in disarray my heart
Broken asunder
A torrential deluge falls
Upon the living and the dead

Notes: Link Hurricane to fallen tree. The last line is a twist on the last line of “The Dead” by James Joyce: “His soul swooned slowly as he heard the snow falling faintly through the universe and faintly falling, like the descent of their last end, upon all the living and the dead.” That sentence has haunted me since I first read the story in high school.

Also note rare English kakekotoba (pivot word) in the 2nd line (my heart) that actually works like it might in Japanese, changing the meaning depending on whether you attach it to the words before or after.

Yes, I’m really upset about my dead tree.

小鳥の歌 20

Lonely, I wait here
Where none but God can find me
He isn’t looking
Like a garage-sale puzzle
Not all the pieces are there

2nd poem

Oh, I cannot breathe
The filthy air clouding my lungs
In these godless times
A hurricane of chaos
Envelops the innocent

Link: poem 1 godless month to where none but God can find me. Poem 2 godless month to these godless times.

I will probably use the 2nd poem in the final sequence, as the 1st one is too modern in feel. But I liked it enough to post it.

小鳥の歌 19

Where are the colors?
How late the summer lingers!
The leaves still verdant
A season out of season
A month when there are no gods

This one is rather hard to see: a mother, sighing, I bend down to start cleaning — to Where are the colors? It actually started as where are the CHILDREN, but the poem then turned into a comment about the leaves remaining green this far into October Kannazuki (神無月) short for kaminashizuki “the month when there are no gods”, commonly called the “godless month” in the Japanese calendar. The eight million or so native gods of Japan all travel to Izumo taisha (the Grand Izumo Shrine) in October, leaving the rest of the country “godless”.

小鳥の歌 14

The scent of wood-smoke
Carried on the autumn wind
And I am brought back
To those happy childhood days
My family around me

Notes: Link: From “premonition” to “I am brought back”, imagined future to remembered past.

Something about the smell of wood-smoke reminds me of autumn during my childhood–never mind that I grew up in Texas! We had a fireplace and my father liked to use it just as the weather started to cool.

小鳥の歌 12

I look up, seeing
The slightest hint of color
Autumn’s harbinger
The leaves whisper “Make ready!”
And a chill runs up my spine

Link: Sinners’ upraised faces to I look up. Since the last poem was purely spiritual, I needed to bring the poems back into the seasonal theme. It’s important that the poems keep their seasonal/natural world grounding, even if the theme wanders away from time to time.